Corvin Vandra

I hope that's better. Sorry about that, but I didn't stop to consider that.

This is the prologue. And on an unrelated sidenote, go Penguins. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ In the pitch black of the night, a figure stirs in

As I sit here all alone inside my head, I remember you upon your throne, and it fills my heart with dread You alone robbed me of my heart. You ...

That's truly remarkable. I loved it. I'm ashamed to say I'm not here to impress you, for I can find no common theme. I just loved reading it. One quick ...

I was just making sure it was good before I built off of it. Thanks for taking the time (however little time it took) to read it. It is fantasy, ...

Please critique, but be gentle. :wink: ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ Gabriel had never been one to look before he ...

I'd feel bad if my crit was longer than your poem. Luckily, that's neigh impossible. Great poem, I felt it deep down. I bow to you (*bows*). Keep up the ...

Awesome, truly awesome. I feel the same way what with the bordeom and whatnot. I've even been where you were, seen that beauty. It's one of my fondest memories, and ...

Not too shabby. I enjoyed it for the most part. Anyways, here we go. "The jutsu had worked, but who knew how long Momo could keep it up. Come on ...

Wow. The ending really threw me. Awesome poem though, great flow, great rhythm, great everything. Just a few quick things. "Standing up now, our hands intertwined, the sun blinding us ...

I loved the first stanze, by the way. The third one was awesome, too. On to the crit, I suppose. The fourth verse kind of stopped the flow of the ...

Dude, this is sick, in every sense of the word. Hilarious, witty, but completely random. Keep it up, it's just my kind of poem. I can't really crit a joke, ...

Yes! Great, I love Bob and Steve. They were the best part of X-Play, until they turned into Attack of the Show. Start turning these out, they're awesome. All I ...

Jeez, that's amazing. Seriously, there's nothing I can say that's negative. Except maybe work on the spacing after the commas, heh. "A gentle touch and an endless hug, never to ...

Really good start. Excellent writing, but very little of anything else. As a reader it's just hard to "connect" with Carmen. I couldn't feel sorry for her or her loss, ...